Help! i dont know if my poem sounds ok?!?

kayl

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we have to write a poem on the welsh mines in my area. i have got the start but not sure if it sounds ok?

A thousand mines closed today,
a reminder of the tradgety,
that poinsened our lives forever.

Many went for a normal day
only then they had their pay.
who knew coal was at such a high price?
when the men who spared,cost nothing more,
when they gave their lives.

Dust filled air wrecked that day,
in the way memory took the way.
 
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