First two poems I wrote?wondering if they suck or not?

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These are my first poems so no laughing!
Alright the first one is about an insane broom writing a letter that its leaving:

If I were a broom all I would do sit on my bristles
Even when someone needed me and gave me a whistle
Because who really wants to be brushed across the floor?
Not me, so I won't do it anymore
I might leave tomorrow or maybe tonight
Go to Hogwarts,find a witch,give her a flight
I really do hope this is okay
I would rather do this than clean up your messes everyday
I might come back after I've learned a spell
Just please don't leave me by the trash with the god-awful smell
I do have feelings,more or less
Only you don't talk to me as much as the rest
I just wanted to tell you this as a heads-up!
And if your sad then,please,cheer up
Like I said, I might come back
Only with a pointy hat colored black
But I don't see why you would have any remorse
You did treat me like a viral curse,of course
You'll always have the dustpan
Yet he is so bland
And what good will he do you with out me in your righthand?

The second one is about a person that never gets any calls but she still pays the bills for the phone

It's so dark in here. I'll have to turn the lamp on
And pull the plug on the telephone
No one calls,so it doesn't matter
I'll call the telephone company later and tell them I don't chatter
It is a sad thing though
Especially when I cough up the monthly dough
For something I don't even use,even when I want to
Because it takes two to make it work for you
Telephones aren't for the solitary
I think I'll load mine in a cannon and shoot it at the auxiliaries

So are they bad,mediocre,or okay,or good?
 
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