Feed Back On My Poetry?

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Kirsten >.<

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okay well i was a tad pissed when i wrote these ha ha.
so give me some feed back on them ?(:

1.
Shattered too a million pieces.
Those words,
That hate,
Your force,
Leaves me alone in this world.
I hate you.

2.
Shot to the ground,
Someone to help me up? No.
That's the answer I'll always get.
Left in a homeless world,
Fighting for us,
Fighting for you.
I'm gone.

3.
My heart.
Memories.
Rushing through my veins.
I can not explain the rush,
You give me.
Drop me now.
Before I fall on my own.

4.
I love your smile.
I love your ways.
You hate your all.
But I've seen you fall.
I'll help you up.
You're just my luck.

I know , I know - most of these dont make sence? haha.
pretty bad x]
 
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