Exploring the laws of nature. Will you comment please?

Once more expressing my child like goofy
I have to refer to "Peanuts and Lucy'
I once, no twice, yowee no thrice
I, the goof, tried to fly to the skies off the barn roof

I wore my Giants ring and paper wings
Tied on with twine I thought I was fine
until I started to slide, then slipping I did glide not so gently did I land;
gramps watched supressing a laugh His mouth covered by his hand.

I was ten and tried again with safety rope well in hand.
Ha, sure the good of that was insecure, as I landed in a Pile of manure.
The fall it seems was gentle enough but took a few baths to get rid of the 'stuff"
I never did try that again and I guess Leonardo wasn't really my friend
Hugs you Scooter I love you.
Hi rex, TY. Um Yowee is like my word but hope websters gets it and gives me royalties.
I've been goofy all my life, so forgive me
"yowee" is most an exclamation of happy or awe or stretch of wow.

Borrowing from a sweet person, "Yikes" is not always nice
 
Hi. Nice vision, this poem speak a true about child hood and growing up. very well writing, very funny it put a graphic image in my head. Simple wonderful. It just reminded me of my self, back in those days thinking i was some kind of super hero unti i came tumbling down.true, emotive, and sensul God bless.
 
Oh wow.... ^_^"

I like the second stanza best, the last two lines in particular.
I thought the whole thing was good, though it switched rhythm a bit suddenly.
Other than that, the flow was good and had a nice rhyme scheme.

It brought me memories of all the barns I've been in, and the *ahem* mishaps that I've enjoyed in there.

Oh by the way, been meaning to ask;

Is there any particular meaning to "yowee"?
(I like that word, it reminds me of Jowee.)
 
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