BambiiGirlHottie
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Heya, guys!
ok, I just need a bit of help with if these descriptions give you a clear picture as to what the characters look like? they're the main characters best friends. ok, here's the snippet from my introduction!
First friend
On the left was Twin 1, or better known as Kaya, was looking at a piece of material I refused to call a skirt. A belt maybe, but not a skirt. It was short, black and had a hefty price tag attached to it. It was no skin off her teeth though. Her ‘Daddy’ paid for everything. Lucky b*tch. Don’t get me wrong, she’s my friend and all but she’s too spoiled. Kaya White. Pale skin, petite body from years of doing Ballet, slightly short of 5’4, amazingly pretty, blonde, curly hair, stunning blue eyes, totally girly. Kaya was basically a porcelain doll. She’s the one you love to hate because your boyfriend is checking her out on the sly.
second friend
Then on the right was Twin 2 looking at a plain white summer dress. Meet Manuella or Manny for short. She was completely opposite to Kaya in every physical way but just as pretty. Tan, Italian skin, slim curvy body fit for a model, 5’5, stunningly pretty, long straight, black hair past her shoulders, big brown, bambi eyes and also totally girly. She’s your beautiful Italian girl with a signature look of big, gold hoop earrings and black heels. She was just as rich as Kaya so the price tag meant nothing to her either.
how does that sound???
please give me some critique!
i either don't write enough for the descriptions or too much!
thanks guys =)
sorry if i didn't make this bit very clear 'slightly short of 5’4' what i mean by it is that she is just under 5'4, but above 5'3. like, she's almost 5'4 but not quite there yet.
sorry for that!
ok, I just need a bit of help with if these descriptions give you a clear picture as to what the characters look like? they're the main characters best friends. ok, here's the snippet from my introduction!
First friend
On the left was Twin 1, or better known as Kaya, was looking at a piece of material I refused to call a skirt. A belt maybe, but not a skirt. It was short, black and had a hefty price tag attached to it. It was no skin off her teeth though. Her ‘Daddy’ paid for everything. Lucky b*tch. Don’t get me wrong, she’s my friend and all but she’s too spoiled. Kaya White. Pale skin, petite body from years of doing Ballet, slightly short of 5’4, amazingly pretty, blonde, curly hair, stunning blue eyes, totally girly. Kaya was basically a porcelain doll. She’s the one you love to hate because your boyfriend is checking her out on the sly.
second friend
Then on the right was Twin 2 looking at a plain white summer dress. Meet Manuella or Manny for short. She was completely opposite to Kaya in every physical way but just as pretty. Tan, Italian skin, slim curvy body fit for a model, 5’5, stunningly pretty, long straight, black hair past her shoulders, big brown, bambi eyes and also totally girly. She’s your beautiful Italian girl with a signature look of big, gold hoop earrings and black heels. She was just as rich as Kaya so the price tag meant nothing to her either.
how does that sound???
please give me some critique!
i either don't write enough for the descriptions or too much!
thanks guys =)
sorry if i didn't make this bit very clear 'slightly short of 5’4' what i mean by it is that she is just under 5'4, but above 5'3. like, she's almost 5'4 but not quite there yet.
sorry for that!