Do you think my poem is any good?

[Beth D]

Here it is. Tell me what you think...


Today Is Bad

The tears feel warm upon my face.
This is a horrible day.
I need to be in your embrace.
Please take the sad away.
You’re the one who makes things better.
You are the one I need.
So, I’ll wrap up in your big sweater,
And let you take the lead.
Tell me, honey, what should I do?
You know I can’t decide.
The one’s who care are so few.
You’re the only one on my side.
Today is bad; you know it’s true,
So take me far away.
I’m just so sick of being blue.
Please brighten up my day.

 

[The Mighty Iano]

Promising, but needs some slight polishing.

 

[I'm Broken]

I could almost sound like a verse to a song I like it. I like the mood and tone, its hows a helpless feeling of wanting to be loved. In heart broken pain. I liked it =)