Do you like this free verse poem i wrote?

[xoxo Amelia Rose]

Title: Become me

Thumb tracks down the song
That fits inside the build up of emotions
Sinking in the soup of my stomach
Waiting to be ripped from the trenches
Ear buds placed inside the ears
Like babies in the arms of mothers
Press the start button to feel
The vibration running fingers along
The hair on the back of my neck, stereo
Blasting through the atoms of my genetics,
Breaking apart my inner feelings
Energy eating away at the heart
Paralyze my body as adrenaline begins
And the lyrics hit you, flow, and swim
Through one ear and out the other
Tears tempted to implode, volume
Kicked you in the stomach, laughed
Atmosphere fading as bloods rushes
Against time to consume your thoughts
Prevent the hands a beat from maneuvering
Through exhilarated organs, corset ribcage,
Through my mouth, making me breathe,
Tilt my head back, cover my ears
To keep the sounds from escaping,
Closing my eyes and letting the music
Become me

 

[xSarbearx]

Whoa! this is amazing! You expressed music in such a graphic and captivating way, I love it! The lines just flow together so seamlessly, they create their own rythm. I like how the title foreshadows the last line. That's definitley a piece of work to be proud of.