Do you like my poem??

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yumiistrawberry

New member
what do you like about it and what do you think its about? thanks!(:
any title suggestions or improvements would be much appreciated!

this hallow ache
never seems to be filled
the silouttes
of two lovers
fill me with longing
if only
i was that blond girl
with red lips
kissing you softly

where did Vanessa go?
how did that brown eyed beauty
slip away
from your thoughts so easily
replaced
with goldilocks,the sweet angel.

that smile
plastered on
is a mask
disguising colours
that i need
to pour out from my soul


those lollipops
and cupcakes
didn't seem to convince you
but that sparkle
in your eyes
is like a star
twinkling in the sky
filling me
with a glimmer of hope
the only thing
keeping me
from throwing away the key.
not all poems have to rhyme..but i do agree it needs to flow better. I wrote this in ten minutes lol.
 
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