Do you like my poem(20 characters)?

YHWH iz EPIC

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Someone asked a question, and I contrived something off the top of my head. What ya' think?

An arduous history the United States consumes,
Thus, we've transcended most of the racial gloom.
A black man in office is indeed a remarkable sight,
So the change we're encountering helps young men like I
Strengthen the ambitious foresight.
Hopefully the world evolves into a world of serene,
Instead of the prior malevolence and the despot regime.
Ben, please elaborate how my reasoning is off. Also, it's my opinion of what I think about the United States, so it's not supposed to be emotional. Thanks for your thoughts, though, although your criticism is vague.
 
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