I'm writing these for a school project, and would like some opinions. Constructive criticism or ideas on how to make them better would be much appreciated! I have to pick two so which ones would you say are the best? Thanks!
The sun gently falls
Warm hues merge, painting the sky
Awaiting nightfall
Day morphs into dusk
Light pierces through the dark sky
Silence surrounds me
Crystals drifting down
Softly dancing in the wind
Gone when you grasp it
Empty all alone
Nothing but your own echo
Deafening silence
The sun gently falls
Warm hues merge, painting the sky
Awaiting nightfall
Day morphs into dusk
Light pierces through the dark sky
Silence surrounds me
Crystals drifting down
Softly dancing in the wind
Gone when you grasp it
Empty all alone
Nothing but your own echo
Deafening silence