do u think its a good poem?

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DEATH...
She is gone
Just when I seemed to get to no her
I am so lost without her
I feel lonely scared and cold
Not even a million tears can bring u back
Baby when are you coming back

im a 13 year old boy trying to get good at poetry soo..
 
well, i know you are just 13, so i'll give you some tips to try and help.

first, you used the wrong kind of know..it's "know" instead of "no"
second, while some poets sometimes don't include punctuation, it is important (especially since you are first starting out) to include correct punctuation!
third, there really are no images (visual or otherwise) You need to include sensory details if you ever want to write anything of significance.
 
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