chyeaahboiy
New member
I wrote this poem and i was wondering what you think.
You did me wrong
I hurt inside
You broke my heart
And crushed my pride
I tried to help
Take away the pain
And teach you of
The love you could gain
And yet my efforts
Went to waste
You became enraged
And stormed out in haste
You'd think i'd have learnt
That life is not fair
But my immaturity
Was clearly still there
Life did me wrong
And left me in a pile
But all that I can do
Is man up and smile
by aamirah salie
okay, so can you tell me what you think, and what i can improve, thank you
You did me wrong
I hurt inside
You broke my heart
And crushed my pride
I tried to help
Take away the pain
And teach you of
The love you could gain
And yet my efforts
Went to waste
You became enraged
And stormed out in haste
You'd think i'd have learnt
That life is not fair
But my immaturity
Was clearly still there
Life did me wrong
And left me in a pile
But all that I can do
Is man up and smile
by aamirah salie
okay, so can you tell me what you think, and what i can improve, thank you
