critisize my poem please!?

Jay P

New member
Tis is how you make me feel
I dont know if my feelins are real
but when im near you i start to shake
and when i speak to you my heart breaks
i dont know how to express
every feeling that i get
i know i want you here to stay
its like i cant spend a day
with out seeing your face
i dont want any mometns to pass away
these feelings i get
i can not explain
why they hurt?
its because
i love you..i want you..i need you
im hereto stay
and when i look in your eyes
a part of my soul dies
because all i want is you
but aall you want is her.
by: me :]


please tell me if its good bad
is the emotion powerful (im thinking if giving this to someone)
if not help me fix it please please please :]
 
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