Dancerx5678
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Love’s Lightning Glory
In the blackened dead sky of night
Mother Nature portrays a dangerous beauty
Swiftly electric lightning strikes
as a majestic silver sword
The hammer of lightning’s heart
Is thunder so brawny and commanding
Lightning runs throughout the sky like a dart
Aiming to hit the target known as earth
Love like lightning is obscurity
Its presence is truly stunning
Lightning is unpredictable
Much like young love
Love is affection and dedication
pulchritude at its glory
love becomes a sweet divine story
of two people’s hearts on flames
Love is prevailing yet fragile
In minutes love may have a
destructive ending like a thunderstorm
With the aftermath being unbearable
To love is to understand this
To be in love is to respect this
I realize I have posted this poem before, but I have re-edited it a lot and I wanted to get feedback on it! Do you love it? Hate it? Let me know what you think! I would like to hear comments regarding how I can make my poem in its final polished state, however if you just simply love everything about it let me know please!
I take all of your comments to heart
In the blackened dead sky of night
Mother Nature portrays a dangerous beauty
Swiftly electric lightning strikes
as a majestic silver sword
The hammer of lightning’s heart
Is thunder so brawny and commanding
Lightning runs throughout the sky like a dart
Aiming to hit the target known as earth
Love like lightning is obscurity
Its presence is truly stunning
Lightning is unpredictable
Much like young love
Love is affection and dedication
pulchritude at its glory
love becomes a sweet divine story
of two people’s hearts on flames
Love is prevailing yet fragile
In minutes love may have a
destructive ending like a thunderstorm
With the aftermath being unbearable
To love is to understand this
To be in love is to respect this
I realize I have posted this poem before, but I have re-edited it a lot and I wanted to get feedback on it! Do you love it? Hate it? Let me know what you think! I would like to hear comments regarding how I can make my poem in its final polished state, however if you just simply love everything about it let me know please!
I take all of your comments to heart