Critique my free verse on self-indulgence?

deezysucker456

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Just feeling bored and I decided to write a free verse or rant. Creative writing is not a common hobby of mine, yet I would still appreciate feedback of any kind!

Self-indulgence is America's sin.
I see Jersey Shore muscles envied and praised.
Countless curls all expended to satisfy the appetite of the ego.
What are their purpose? Accessory.
Useless popcorn that yells and screams beauty.
Behind the walls of narcissism hide true self.
Stop looking in your mirrors. Break them all, break them with your face.
In a world of manufactured bricks, be the misshapen rock that collapses the tower.
 
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