Could you please read my poem and give me some opinions?

S

Sajda

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Hi :)
Okay so I just wrote this and it is pretty rough, could you help me out?

Thank you!

I stand here at the cross roads
Teary eyes turn away
My heart has been shallow
For yet another day

I walk down here at the cross roads
My troubles black and white
Though I believe in suicide
I sleep through one more night

I sat here at the cross roads
And I sat there for a while
My blistered feet are scorching
I stop counting after six miles

I stand here at the cross roads
Dried eyes sit through rainy days
I feel like I’ve been losing
I’m nothing but a stray
 
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