Could u please take your time to re-phrase to make this business-like maill better?

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Dear Mr ABC,
Please take your time to read the attached transcript of the stealing (***) about 28 cable meters long at the Process area.

As far as I know, the current relocation of crusher machine caused power cut to the cable, leading to thieves imposed to chop it off.

We worked out the security team to step up the surveillance at this area. Please coordinate with us in put some reasonable measures into place to stop similar stealing at once.
Thank you & Warm Regards
DCG
 
Dear Mr ABC,

I'm writing to you in regards to the recent theft of the 28m cable in the Process Area.

Due to the recent relocation of the crusher machine, the power cable was cut, leaving it exposed and unsecured. Thus, resulting in the theft of the cable.

To prevent any future loss, we have since set up a surveillance system including security personnel on site.

If you have any further suggestions on our security measures, please advise.

Thank you.

Kind Regards,
DCG


- I'm stoked I made sense of that! It was defo a challenge.
 
Dear Mr ABC,

I'm writing to you in regards to the recent theft of the 28m cable in the Process Area.

Due to the recent relocation of the crusher machine, the power cable was cut, leaving it exposed and unsecured. Thus, resulting in the theft of the cable.

To prevent any future loss, we have since set up a surveillance system including security personnel on site.

If you have any further suggestions on our security measures, please advise.

Thank you.

Kind Regards,
DCG


- I'm stoked I made sense of that! It was defo a challenge.
 
That must be about the worst Business letter I have ever read, apart from it making no sense who would end a business letter with warm regards.
 
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