im trying to win a poetry contest. i am 14 in 9th grade. please tell me if its good and if not any ideas on how to fix it.
Make Believe
Go to your world of make believe
You ran out of tricks up your sleeve
Time to give up, time to give in
The world seems to have taken the win.
Go to the world where the moon and sun
Stay visible in the same great horizon
At night the stars shine so bright
During the day, clouds are pure white.
Go to the world where no one dies
And nobody hurts you with their lies.
That lovely place that seems so right
The world where nobody wants to fight.
Even when the world is in the lead
Just think of them, you are their only need
Hold your head up high, don’t give up yet
Just pass this by, you’ll eventually forget.
Make Believe
Go to your world of make believe
You ran out of tricks up your sleeve
Time to give up, time to give in
The world seems to have taken the win.
Go to the world where the moon and sun
Stay visible in the same great horizon
At night the stars shine so bright
During the day, clouds are pure white.
Go to the world where no one dies
And nobody hurts you with their lies.
That lovely place that seems so right
The world where nobody wants to fight.
Even when the world is in the lead
Just think of them, you are their only need
Hold your head up high, don’t give up yet
Just pass this by, you’ll eventually forget.