Constructive criticism on poem please?

Marissa H

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"Time is a killer"

In every way, shape and form
Anyone who said time heals
Doesn't know a thing about the pain in life
Or the wounds of love

Love cuts deep

Sometimes
Giving it time just allows the incision to fester
Time infects
Time kills
But death is not the answer

Nor am I

The answer is a paradox
So clear yet unclear
The answer is you

So don't sit idle

Yes time will pass you by
The thing it really does however
Is take your life away

You decide what you want to do
with the time you choose to give yourself
Because only you can heal you

Nothing else

You make the first move
Take the first step
And better things will follow


yes i know it's blank verse... (kinda not even a poem)
but thank you for your time and comments =)
 
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