advise needed on how to improve and end this poem. the poem is basically about how i'm feeling right now, i hope you enjoy it... here it is:
Drifting in and out of perfect illusion
I’m stuck between insanity and life’s dilution
The people’s foolery and confusion
I can make neither sense nor conclusion.
The feeling of hope when all is bleak
The need for strength when one is weak
The lust for youth not antique
All is standard and common when should be unique.
I grow tiresome and hesitant of my peers
I feel hidden behind a veil of tears
If I only could hold on to all your fears
I need not waste another year.
Please take into consideration that i am 13 so therefore i know this poem is not great, please understand my lack of profession and offer guidance and assistance.
Thank you very much.xxx
Drifting in and out of perfect illusion
I’m stuck between insanity and life’s dilution
The people’s foolery and confusion
I can make neither sense nor conclusion.
The feeling of hope when all is bleak
The need for strength when one is weak
The lust for youth not antique
All is standard and common when should be unique.
I grow tiresome and hesitant of my peers
I feel hidden behind a veil of tears
If I only could hold on to all your fears
I need not waste another year.
Please take into consideration that i am 13 so therefore i know this poem is not great, please understand my lack of profession and offer guidance and assistance.
Thank you very much.xxx