thanks so much!? Im not done with it yet, my prompt for my essay is describing being connected to a special place and this boy and his room is my special place. I have yet to explain what he is like but so far I have added some dialogue and described the "special place" and I will get to the more intimate stuff later but what do you think of it so far?
“Race you to the top” I said in an enthusiastic voice. “Prepare to lose” he replied confidently. “One, two, three.” We zoomed up the stairs finally reaching the top. I won of course. “Oh what was that?” “You lost to a girl!” I said in a playful tone. “Whatever, I let you win” he said in a low voice, obviously trying to brush it off. Down the hall and past 3 doors... there it was, Spencer’s bedroom. I can remember it as if I were standing there at this very moment. As you walked into the dimly lit room, you saw a 5 gallon fish tank that housed a beautifully vibrant red betta, creating a cool effect against the royal blue walls. White, untucked sheets were carelessly shoved at the foot of the full sized bed, and across the bed was a muted 32 inch television that always seemed to be on ESPN. School papers, books, and board games were haphazardly strewn here and there. Despite the disarray, the room still gave off a relaxing vibe.
“Race you to the top” I said in an enthusiastic voice. “Prepare to lose” he replied confidently. “One, two, three.” We zoomed up the stairs finally reaching the top. I won of course. “Oh what was that?” “You lost to a girl!” I said in a playful tone. “Whatever, I let you win” he said in a low voice, obviously trying to brush it off. Down the hall and past 3 doors... there it was, Spencer’s bedroom. I can remember it as if I were standing there at this very moment. As you walked into the dimly lit room, you saw a 5 gallon fish tank that housed a beautifully vibrant red betta, creating a cool effect against the royal blue walls. White, untucked sheets were carelessly shoved at the foot of the full sized bed, and across the bed was a muted 32 inch television that always seemed to be on ESPN. School papers, books, and board games were haphazardly strewn here and there. Despite the disarray, the room still gave off a relaxing vibe.