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elitegirl
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My teacher has assigned my class to write an original sonnet. It does not necessarily have to be in iambic pentameter, but it must contain a turn and follow some sort of rhyme scheme. Can you tell me what you think of mine? Strengths? Improvements?
My poem is:
Climbing the tall mountain reminded me
Hitting the defrost button in my car
It was like the fog had cleared causing glee
Slowly moving my feet, raising the bar
Everything seemed just great at the very top
I could see for miles, our love exposed
Because of him my smile did not dare drop
It couldn't be better, even if he proposed
But you see we are Romeo and Juliet
Our love could not be out in the open
Although near perfect, the time was not yet
Yes it's hard, but you won't find me mopin'
Now I know to take it for what it is
An intro to temporary sweet bliss.
My poem is:
Climbing the tall mountain reminded me
Hitting the defrost button in my car
It was like the fog had cleared causing glee
Slowly moving my feet, raising the bar
Everything seemed just great at the very top
I could see for miles, our love exposed
Because of him my smile did not dare drop
It couldn't be better, even if he proposed
But you see we are Romeo and Juliet
Our love could not be out in the open
Although near perfect, the time was not yet
Yes it's hard, but you won't find me mopin'
Now I know to take it for what it is
An intro to temporary sweet bliss.