Can someone please read my essay and tell me if its good so far?

Anna K

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Many things can bring you joy to this world and some can even create a life changing experience. Throughout my life time i had a lot of life changing experiences but i feel as if this one was the one that stood out the most. Spring break 2008 was that week. Growing up as a kid i was always the one who was stuck in my hometown while all my friends went on vacations and explored other parts of the world. I felt like i wanted to get away from reality and live a dream for once. I wanted to see a different part of the world which surrounds nothing but beauty and Florida was one of them. Everything changed when my best friend and her family decided to invite me to Daytona, Florida to stay with their family for a week. We took a road trip so we also visited Tennessee, Georgia, and Kentucky that was also an exciting experience.
Saturday was the day we arrived to Daytona, Florida. We unpacked our bags, met all their family members, and decided to look around some more. Everything felt so different from where i live. I noticed that the weather was a lot different too. The air was so refreshing expecially if you live by an ocean, it gives your skin extra moisturizer. Most of the times the sun was out but it also had its rainy days. It also seemed like everywhere you turned, you would either find a lizard or a palm tree.
Sunday was our first day to explore some parts of Daytona. We decided to go put put golfing and ride some go-karts. That made it feel like i was bringing back some of my childish memories. We also visited a couple old fashioned car auctions and after a while we went in town and bought some ice cream and cool souvenirs. Later that evening, we all went out to eat. They had many restaurants that i've never heard of before but the food was amazing. When we got home we all decided to jump in the pool and enjoy the rest of our fun. We wanted to forget about all our miseries, and focus on what we have in store for us tomorrow.
Monday was the day I finally saw an ocean. Everything was so right, it had a board walk, a little town next to it, and all the sea shells lying around. The water was very warm and i never knew how salty it was until i got a taste of it. The waves were nice but not as big that day. After a while of swimming, we rode four wheelers, ate some ice cream, and danced to some music that was playing from inside our car. A few moments later we left the beach to check out the town next to it. It reminded me of an outlet mall, everything was so colorful and the people looked so happy.
Tuesday we didn't do much, we had to stay home because their family was having a birthday party for their daughter and we all decided to stay and help them out. We had a cookout, played a few games, and swam in their pool. Later on when a few people left they decided to take us shopping. We went to a couple malls and a few stores that i've never even heard of before. It seems like the prices there are the same as where i live at. When we arrived home, we had another party but it was for the younger people. We went out back to have some fun. We danced to some music, swam in their pool, and laughed the whole night. We didn't get too much sleep that night, instead we chose to lay outside and look up at the stars above us.
Wednesday was my favorite day of all, the day we went to Clearwater, Florida.
maybe help me proof-read it if i can make it sound better
 
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