hazman akmal
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just please check my grammar mistake and I'll give you free 5 points.....
please I'm not a good writer
Banana
I took a bite
It tasted
Funny,
Swiftly
I heard
A shout,
Disorderliness
All around
My house,
I stop
And wondered
Where was it from
Tick tick tick
The time
Went past
Finally i
Figured it out
Its coming
From
My banana,
It all started
15 minutes ago,
When I was
At a
Supermarcado,
Buying some
Material for
My homework,
Suddenly,
Sniff sniff sniff
My nose
Smell something
Really nice,
It smell
Like a banana
I follow
The smell
And here
I was, standing,
In front of
Many,
Bananas,
It was the
Best day
In the world
Of best day,
I took one
And looked at
It, I saw,
A yellow
Peel covered
With yellow
Colored
And small spot
Covered with
Black,
As I ripped
The
Banana’s peel
I heard
Somebody
Calling
For help,
I quickly
Took a bite
And hear
Someone
Was shouting
Lollipop
I went to
May fair
And meet so
Many new friends
And one of
Them is called
Lollipop,
It all started
When I was
Walking
With my
Friend Miguel
We were running
Having fun
But suddenly I
Saw a lollipop
Hanging in the
Candy bar
I walked slowly
Toward it
And saw
Many Different
Colors, and inside
Of it,
There was
Many different
Flavor
I bought one and
Hold it in my palm,
Quickly I ran to
The bathroom
And sat down
I stared at it for
A while
Admiring
The red colored
Plastic
This reminds
Me of a
Movie called
Saw,
I opened it
And Slowly I put it in
My mouth,
But suddenly
I heard
Someone shouting
My name,
I was shocked
And accidently
I dropped it
The lollipop
Makes a loud
Noise causing
Everyone to know
Where I was,
Quickly I put it in
Mouth and
The taste wasn’t
Bad at all
please I'm not a good writer
Banana
I took a bite
It tasted
Funny,
Swiftly
I heard
A shout,
Disorderliness
All around
My house,
I stop
And wondered
Where was it from
Tick tick tick
The time
Went past
Finally i
Figured it out
Its coming
From
My banana,
It all started
15 minutes ago,
When I was
At a
Supermarcado,
Buying some
Material for
My homework,
Suddenly,
Sniff sniff sniff
My nose
Smell something
Really nice,
It smell
Like a banana
I follow
The smell
And here
I was, standing,
In front of
Many,
Bananas,
It was the
Best day
In the world
Of best day,
I took one
And looked at
It, I saw,
A yellow
Peel covered
With yellow
Colored
And small spot
Covered with
Black,
As I ripped
The
Banana’s peel
I heard
Somebody
Calling
For help,
I quickly
Took a bite
And hear
Someone
Was shouting
Lollipop
I went to
May fair
And meet so
Many new friends
And one of
Them is called
Lollipop,
It all started
When I was
Walking
With my
Friend Miguel
We were running
Having fun
But suddenly I
Saw a lollipop
Hanging in the
Candy bar
I walked slowly
Toward it
And saw
Many Different
Colors, and inside
Of it,
There was
Many different
Flavor
I bought one and
Hold it in my palm,
Quickly I ran to
The bathroom
And sat down
I stared at it for
A while
Admiring
The red colored
Plastic
This reminds
Me of a
Movie called
Saw,
I opened it
And Slowly I put it in
My mouth,
But suddenly
I heard
Someone shouting
My name,
I was shocked
And accidently
I dropped it
The lollipop
Makes a loud
Noise causing
Everyone to know
Where I was,
Quickly I put it in
Mouth and
The taste wasn’t
Bad at all