can someone please correct my ballad poem?

Chris Lopez

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its supposed to be a ballad but when i handed it in the teacher said that it didnt have a story therefore it is not a ballad poem can someone please correct it so it has a story?

it needs to go like this
De DUM de DUM de DUM de DUM
De DUM de DUM de DUM
De DUM de DUM de DUM de DUM
De DUM de DUM de DUM


He was a line of poetry
who flew about the earth
he would sing with all his might
for every soul to hear

some were filled with excitement
others were brought to tears
but they all agreed on one thing,
no other sound could compare.

he was a line of poetry
and never to be seen
at night he slept beneath the stars
and dreamt a thousand dreams
 
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