can some1 critique some poetry for me?

[SparksFlyPeopleDie]

http://www.wattpad.com/user/sparksflypeopledie

i have like 5 poems on there, read them and give me some feedback plz

 

[Candyman]

try posting your poems here. I don't follow links to other websites

 

[Clayton Bigsby]

OMG what the hell was that? My eyes are burning because of the lack of hmmmmmm goodness im thinking!!! Were you born this stupid or did you work at it?