This is my poem I wud like constrective ctritisism please and help with it to make it better and stuff
Spastic, I see you are a spastic,
But you are free in your mind
Although your body is broken and twisted,
Your mind can fly free like a bird
Like an eagle sawing high,
A disability does not control me,
My wings are beating faster
I go up and I come down again
I am free in the winds
Spastic, I see you are a spastic,
And you cabn laugh and geer
And throw chewing gum at me but you
Don’t know how freed I am
I go up, I come down,
All around, to the ground,
I am spastic, I am free
... becauze I have her at my side
wat is a synonyms please?
I can do that but im trying to reach inside the peoples heads: eg
I am a man with a plastic sack,
I go toiley in it. cause I hurt my back,
Well it wasn’t really hurt, I was born this way,
I could sit and rhyme poems here today
Etc etc
- its a bit primateive
Spastic, I see you are a spastic,
But you are free in your mind
Although your body is broken and twisted,
Your mind can fly free like a bird
Like an eagle sawing high,
A disability does not control me,
My wings are beating faster
I go up and I come down again
I am free in the winds
Spastic, I see you are a spastic,
And you cabn laugh and geer
And throw chewing gum at me but you
Don’t know how freed I am
I go up, I come down,
All around, to the ground,
I am spastic, I am free
... becauze I have her at my side
wat is a synonyms please?
I can do that but im trying to reach inside the peoples heads: eg
I am a man with a plastic sack,
I go toiley in it. cause I hurt my back,
Well it wasn’t really hurt, I was born this way,
I could sit and rhyme poems here today
Etc etc
- its a bit primateive