Jokerz Wild
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I'm writing a poem for someone important to me but I'm having trouble. Can you rate and give suggestions on this poem?
As I stare into the sky I see her face,
Because in my heart she’ll always have a special place.
Sometimes I feel like I could have the world and not be happy,
Because without her it would all mean nothing.
What I say I mean to be true without bluffing.
If I could never talk to another,
I wouldn’t care as long as I could hear her voice.
To me this is the smartest choice,
Because to me she means the world.
I wait and wait to see what comes next,
Only hoping that with her is how my destiny will be unfurled.
Why I feel this way cannot be explained,
But each day is better with a look in each eye.
The fact that I’m a fool is information famed,
But she doesn’t care because unlike others I try.
As I stare into the sky I see her face,
Because in my heart she’ll always have a special place.
Sometimes I feel like I could have the world and not be happy,
Because without her it would all mean nothing.
What I say I mean to be true without bluffing.
If I could never talk to another,
I wouldn’t care as long as I could hear her voice.
To me this is the smartest choice,
Because to me she means the world.
I wait and wait to see what comes next,
Only hoping that with her is how my destiny will be unfurled.
Why I feel this way cannot be explained,
But each day is better with a look in each eye.
The fact that I’m a fool is information famed,
But she doesn’t care because unlike others I try.