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Saranghaeyo!
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Well title says it all, but please don't steal, or take this poem. but if you do, please credit it. lol. Um, so this is my first poem i have ever made. Not sure if it's good, but i need your guys people point of view on how to make this poem better, what to remove, and if you want you can add things to it. I would highly appreciate it.
Title: Battlefield
Her love life is like a battlefield
Feelings, emotions, situations are completely sealed.
The whole area is filled with fear and pain,
she suffers from tears as if it was driving her insane.
She lost this battle,
to whom she loves.
She lost this battle,
from the girl that came from above.
Her innocence love for him will never be revealed,
All she want's him to know that her love for him was truly real,
Her faith, her pride, are useless to fight,
But you know what her heart is squeezing too tight.
It hurts a lot, you don't know how it feels.
Every little skin of her heart is slowly being peeled.
Shes mental, shes crazy, shes dealing with plenty of stress
The love is like a burden, though her life is an outrageously a mess.
-- MQ.
** In advance thank you so much.*
Title: Battlefield
Her love life is like a battlefield
Feelings, emotions, situations are completely sealed.
The whole area is filled with fear and pain,
she suffers from tears as if it was driving her insane.
She lost this battle,
to whom she loves.
She lost this battle,
from the girl that came from above.
Her innocence love for him will never be revealed,
All she want's him to know that her love for him was truly real,
Her faith, her pride, are useless to fight,
But you know what her heart is squeezing too tight.
It hurts a lot, you don't know how it feels.
Every little skin of her heart is slowly being peeled.
Shes mental, shes crazy, shes dealing with plenty of stress
The love is like a burden, though her life is an outrageously a mess.
-- MQ.
** In advance thank you so much.*