Black Feathers Mirror Me The Sky

[Lexus-Nut]

I've been dealt vision beyond what I can comprehend
I strive, I struggle, I bite my lip,
I grate my teeth, a vengeful flavor chalky sanguine
Coating my palate in its milky crust
Bitterly I climb, I choke, swallow
Black feathers, mirror me the sky
I saw my reflection
I took it and found a way out of this two-way mirror
Dry-board-walled wet and welling
And would it be a boast to say this pass

 

[TriiZxx]

Pretty terrible man, and I'm not even trolling.

 

[Arik F]

Thanks dad.

 

[ACF]

oh wow this is really good!!!!

 

[O A]

it is !!!!

 

[Moiraes Fate]

soooo could i get a critique on this or is everyone just gonna be hella rude?