Are these verses I write decent?

I posted this, but nobody besides marketing seemed interested. The song is called "Distinct Denial" (at least for now). I'm just a wee little 14 year old, so have mercy.

Finger running down your spine
Establish remorseless ecstasy
Lock the door- lock the door
Temporary urgency
Alone with lucidity
Dripping addicted misery
On the floor- on the floor

Five saviors- your undoing
Never satiating the thirst
Braving the things intruding
Anger fit to burst

Love in the making

The wonders of adolescence
Refusal to act in your presence
But on your own you feel at home
In ever strong denial

The addiction to this shame

This flower attempts to blossom
Rushing what it feels to be so awesome
This portrayal of guilt
Of a divine unholy time
Moments to be in your prime

Independence to be faking
Selflessness to be a-breaking
(Proud tenderness to be taking)

Knowing this is endless fire
You dare not make a sound
Hush your lips- hush your lips
There’s something left to be desired
But you look so weak and tired
Your charge is never fired
In the dips- in the dips
 
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