ARE THESE GOOD POEMS??? please look and tell me...?

Your thoughts are so poetic. Keep writing. You are able to put small heartfelt ideas into poems. Take care of the words you spell. A misspelled word mars the meaning of a poem. You must present a poem for the readers to feel comfort without such errors.

For example,
My hear said yes
So for once i let my heard win

Where you mean 'heart' at two places but not cared to look back when you typed.

Don't write negative endings like the 8th one. A poem must instill hope and give an air of subtle joy when it is read. 12th one is morose but makes the reader think.

You have great poetic skill, you can still improve these poems if you could revise further.

Turn your sorrow into prayerful thoughts. Just pray when you are alone. Prayer wins over all that is negative. You are born to win. Write winning side of life by defeating the haunting agonies.
 
1)
I see a little bird that fell out of its nest
it looks lost and lonely
sort of like me
i am lost without your guidance
i am lonely without you company
mom, I need you
-tori( me)

2)
as I lay in my bed
i ask myself
why am i here
i ask am i wanted
then i look at your picture
and remember
-tori(me)

3)
I've only known you for a short while I may not know your past
I may not know your present life
But my dear, Ik now one thing
I feel a connection between me and you
I dont know if you fell it too
But i know i do
I know i love you
-tori(me)

4)
Here i am but know one cares
all i am is a forgotten shadow
Im about as worthless as dirt
exceot dirt has things to grow
me?
I have nothing to do
no importance here
like i said im just a forgotten shadow.
-tori(me)

5)
I sit in this dark room and listen
I hear my heart pound
For my heart has been through so much
What you did only made it worse
You made it think you loved me
Even though my mind said no
My hear said yes
So for once i let my heard win
And soon enough
My heart was shattered by that one sentence
"i just dont love you anymore"
Oh, how my mind said i told you so
but my heart just cried why
-tori(me)-

6)
Is she better, more pretty
Am i not good enough
What did i miss
Who took my place, you said you loved me
Then left me in the dust
You go around and act like nothing is wrong
You say we can just be friends
Or do you just want to torture me more
You were my rock, my stone
Just to say your name is a song
I cant sing wt without you
-tori(me)

7)
Start living
End those dreamless nights
Know someone cares
Learn to love once again
Those are just the few things you taught me
You came from nowhere
Enlightened my life in a way only a few have done
opened a door that was locked tight
A door that hadnt been open for years.
-tori(me)

8)
Blade to the wrist
Bullet to the temple
Blood rushing
I've thought about these temporary escapes
I say one try wont hurt
I convince myself i deserve an escape
I've been through everything
Just make me a bit happier right?
I grip the knife
Carefully make the perfect slit
Blood rushing
maybe a tad deeper for all the pain
Just a tad
Wait, what happening
That wonderful pleasure of being in control has backfired
Into pain, horrid pain
Im feeling weak
Maybe just maybe i shouldnt have went a tad more
Everything is going blurry
I hurry and grab for paper and pen
Write those last most precious words
I take my last breath
and sleep, and endless sleep
-tori(me)

9)
when im full of sorrow I look up to the stars
When im overtaken by fury i throw stones in a lake
But when i think of you i loop at your picture and wish
I wish you wouldnt take me for granted
I wish you would just take me back
love me again
-tori(me)

10)
If only if only you could come back
the chances of that are like Cody ever being one piece
Somehow i thought the only reason i was here
was to keep you together
but it turns out i wasnt

However, I might have found a new reason
I think Im here for Cody
Without me i really dont know where he would be
I think i might be keeping him form leaving
but who know
Cody is unpredictable

If only if only life worked like a drawing
you could make it how you wanted
erase all the smudges
keep all the miracles
until it was perfect
-tori(me)

11)
Day after Day
Night after Night
when will things change
when will you finally notice Im the one
the one that doesnt care hoe you look
the one that loves you for who you are
Just waiting for that day
the day when you will finally notice me
-tori (me)

12)
have you ever just wanted to runaway
Runaway from all the pain
away from all the tears and hate
no, i bet you havnt
I bet you dont know how it feels
how it feels to be abandoned
to be left in the dust
no, you dont know how if feels
to be all alone i this big forsaken world
-tori(me)


*****thanks for taking hte time to look at these,, when i write it is my way of expressing myself. so please put he number of the poem(s) you like and feel free to explain or say your opinion. also if you want you can put you own poem here..i love looking at other peoples poems. or you can tell me how to improve a poem or if oyu htink one need improvement...THANKS :) btw) i dont cut myself
 
those are good. your in a lot of pain right now aren't you or you where when you wrote these? I hope things get better for you.
I like number 2 and number 11
 
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