Any revisions I can make on my poem to improve?

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Drops of rain splatter
Wetting the windowsill
my pale, still flustering cheeks,
turn, opposing the occurrence
your voice is the only thing
that can give me any reassurance

My life boat has already capsized,
Stuck out at sea
And mesmerized I glance out from beneath the covers
To witness the waves of rain splinter
I’m looking for anything,
Just a hint of him
So I can stop drowning
 
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