Another Something To Self-Medicate Away

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overunder

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It takes some thinking,
and about four or five pictures,
To start my day.
To find myself where I am,
At a wits end, only an inch from its start.
Always striving for reassurance,
To an unnecessary degree.
I shouldn't be the one who feels so needy.
 
these pictures thing is nicely ambiguous, like interesting.

it's an unfinished thought to me, like it resolve, and that's what seems to be conclusion, so this feels like a question.. i guess tho, that's what make it interesting.

i'm not really looking at the language but what is meant behind this right now

what do you think bout my evaluation?
 
I like it. Less is always better in my opinion. If you wanted to you could change "only an inch from it's start" to "only an inch from it's beginning." It would rhyme and flow much better. However 'beginning' doesn't work as well with 'end' as 'start,' but it's your call. Really nitpicking here because I'm not finding many flaws. There's definitely room for a few more analogies, like maybe one at the end to really drive home the emotion behind that last line.
 
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