Another poem I wrote....Comment on it?

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This is another poem I wrote. I am only 13, so I'm sure it's not that great. But, I enjoy writing poetry, and would like to get better at it. Please give me your thoughts. It's a long poem, sorry. Thanks.
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Depending on

your point of view,

many things

can be seen

differently.

Either we

are like many,

or we are

all different.



Like many,

I have two eyes,

a nose,

two ears,

a mouth,

a face,

a head.



Like many,

I have a neck,

two shoulders,

a torso.



Like many,

I have two bicepts,

two elbows,

two fore-arms,

two arms.



Like many,

I have two wrists,

two palms,

ten fingers,

two hands.



Like many,

I have a waist,

two hips,

two thighs,

two knees,

two calves,

two legs.



Like many,

I have two ankles,

two feet,

ten toes.



But, unlike many,

or even all,

they are mine,

and no one elses.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two eyes,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

a nose,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

two ears,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

a mouth,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

a face,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

a head,

that is like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have a neck,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

two shoulders,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

a torso

that is like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two bicepts,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

two elbows,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

two fore-arms,

two arms

that are like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two wrists,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two palms,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Ten fingers,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two hands

that are like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have a waist,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

Two hips,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two thighs,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two knees,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two calves,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two legs

that are like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two ankles,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Ten toes,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two feet

that are like no other.



So weather

your glass is

half empty,

or half full

can change

many views.

Do you live

to be alike,

or live

because you are alike.

Or, do you

live to be different,

or live because

you are diffent?



I have just

one, simple answer.



You are yourself

and always will be

no matter what

change or stage

you go through,

or even if

you are a twin.



My answer

is that I am just simply

Taylor, and

always will be

no matter what

view you have.
 
i like it and it has a little to much detail but on the other hand i think it is very well written.
 
Kinda runs on a bit..but not bad..not bad at all.
Don't ever stop writing..
All the best..
 
Kinda runs on a bit..but not bad..not bad at all.
Don't ever stop writing..
All the best..
 
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