Am i a good poet please tell me?

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Ok so heres the poem, and no i have never went to jail / killed anyone.

i am not the one to ask

me killing her was not a task

i would not kill my very best friend

she was there for me until the end

and now while i sit here upon you judge

leaking from my door was my best friends blood.
 
To be completely honest, the rhymes are too forced, there is no imagery (or any poetic devices, for that matter). I like your idea though, but I think you need to present it in more of a metaphorical sense.
 
This is a "dramatic monologue," similar to Robert Browning's "My Last Duchess," or "Porphyria's Lover."

It works well in getting us inside the narrator's head, but it could be longer. The various ways in which "she" was a best friend? The times shared together? Her loyalty? Exploring and giving a little detail about each would make us fascinated by her . . . and make the realization that she died, bloodily, at the narrator's door all the more chilling.

You're a good poet, and this is a very good first draft.

Polish it up and it will shine.
 
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