Advice and opinions on my poem?

Beth

New member
*The wrong path:*

Take my hand * *
And we can be in this together
So please take my offer*
For I will not let you wonder
Ill be your light
If you be my path
And we will be off on our way

This is the darkest moment
But do not be afraid
I'm your light
Here to guide your way
While you be my path
Giving me a way

Our road is difficult*
Much more bumps to come
But if you stay holding on
To my hand
You will never have to say*
"goodbye"

Is your faith to thin?
You let go of my hand
As your light fades out
You say your goodbye

With your knife in your hand
And blood on the ground*
I realize you tooked your life
Hopeless and scared*
I release your grip
And cut away

The dark time is over
For it is morning
The sun shining*
With to best friends limp*
Side to side
No heart beat in them
Just their pail Skin
With the words written on their peaceful bodies
" thanks for showing me the way"
 
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