Abuse/Romance story need Ideas got any?

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Maaliya Angelas

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I'm writing a story about a boy named Jason, and a girl named Kaliya. It is an abuse/romance story, they both love each other but ever scince Jasons brother died, Jason starts abusing Kaliya. I need ideas for what they should fight about, what should happen later and some extra names for new characters.Oh if anyone could give me examples on what the characters look like that'd be helpful.

Extra Characters to use in Ideas

Jeydon (Jason's best friend)///Jeydon is the only one who knows about the abuse.///
Constance (Kaliya's best friend)
Kyle (Jasons gang leader that tried to rape Kaliya)
Jessy(Gang member)///Jessy's dad is a drunk and always rapes his Mom.///
Carter(Gang member)///Carter is dating Milly behind Kyles back///
Riley(Gang memeber)///Riley's parrents hate him so he has no permennent home///
Milly (Kyles sister)

If you could help me with last names for these people as well as I deas for them that would be awesome. I know its probably a bit much to ask lol you dont have to give answers for everything just to let you know.
Okay no offence but I think you guys are seeing the situation totally wrong. See the gang are not all bad people. They just seem like they are cuz they are stuck in bad situations. Jason does love Kaliya but he's in a tough spot. The only half rapist in the gang is kyle. It's Jessy's dad that is the second one. And they are not cheating its just Carter and Milly like each other but, Kyle does not want his sister involved therefor that is why they are dating behind his back. And another detail, I AM NOT A VICTUM THIS IS JUST A STORY MY LIFE IS ACTUALLY PERFECT. I.AM.NOT.AN.ABUSED.CHILD. GOD DONUT!!
 
You can come up with the character development yourself. With the names, it's helpful to look up some name websites or books and figure out which fits what character best. Don't like looking up names in books? Then borrow names from the people you know, the characters don't have to relate to the people you know in terms of personality, you're just taking the name.

With the looks, browse pictures or look at the people around you when you're outside (it sounds a bit creepy but it helps a lot); start noting hair color, eye color, face shape, skin color, eye shape, hair length, tattoos, scars, etc. then start to build your characters on what you see; imagine them and think about how you see them, I mean, you can't think of Jason and have blank face there instead of a face. Once again, why not base the looks on the people you know?

Also, these kinds of stories are sensitive. You have to think about this one thoroughly or else you'll end up offending loads of people and since you just said that you haven't been abused you can't possibly know what it's *really* like to be abused. Proper research, sensitivity and empathy is needed for the story to work.
 
girl i just have to say, what the _ is going on in that head of yours, dam girl, some messed up sht right there.
i guess its true what they say, writers are just psychopaths unable to commit the deed so they write instead.
haha, never said it was a bad thing thou

if you think about its so true, look at king that guy has some fked up issue's but would they ever hurt a person not on paper?
anyway whatever gets you off girl!
would help you but rape despises me so i wont have anything to do with it.
 
Well, I can give you a few tips and critiques:

1. A lot of the characters have way too similar sounding names. Readers are likely to get them all mixed up and lose track of who's who. The golden rule is to have everybody's name start with a different letter and also sound really different and be of varying lengths. You've got Jason, Jeydon, Jessy, Riley, Milly, Kaliya, Carter, Kyle, and Constance. Can you see how that would create some major problems? It needs to be more like Jake, Catherine, Lot, Rhiannon, AJ, etc.

2. It sounds like Kaliya is just a victim. Abuse victim, almost rape victim, etc. What's the story you want to tell with her? Where is her strength?

3. Most of the male characters just seem to be demonized monsters. One's abusive, two are rapists, one is a cheater, etc.

So, basically, you've got a bunch of mean guys, at least two victimized females, and you just know that you want to tell a story about abuse? I think you really need to switch some things up and think it through more. The story and characters alike need to be three-dimensional.

If you want an idea, maybe make one of the gang members a good guy and undercover cop. Maybe he urges Kaliya to help him out, get strong, and turn some people in. Have that be her strength and her conflict.

EDIT: You can't be a half-rapist. You either are or are not. He *tried* to commit the deed and would have, so therefore, he is a rapist. Jessy's dad is the second male rapist. Kaliya is a victim of sexual assault, and so is Jessy's mom. So I'm saying that you're leaning too heavily towards demonized males and victimized females. That's not an interesting story to me. Have Kaliya's best friend Constance be the cop or something. Do something to tip the scales and give your girls some strength, and throw in some wholly good guys while you're at it. Or just throw in an evil female to be an equal opportunist. Balance.

You also need to develop some sort of actual plot. A bunch of screwed up people + "what should they fight about?" is not a plot.

There are God donuts?
 
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