A love poem...want feedback?

[clmtigers1]

I wrote a love poem/song:
The first time I saw you
I said to myself you're beautiful
I asked myself if you were an angel
cause you're really really beautiful

And this one day
I came to your house and I said
something that you never heard
its that I love you love you love you
like no one else before

I moved closer
I can hear you breathing
You like what you're hearing
I move closer and we are kissing
The wind is howling
The mountains are crumbling
But I can't hear nothing
cause I love you love you love you like no one else before
i love you love you love you like no one else before
i love you love you love you like no one else before
And I always will

 

[Jane]

Cheesy but sweet.

 

[Bumble B]

who ever you wrote this MAGNIFICENT BEAUTIFUL poem for, needs to read it. this is breath taking especially for that lucky girl

 

[HanSolo725]

Men writing poems equals gay.

 

[HanSolo725]

Men writing poems equals gay.