I had an emotionally abusive English teacher while in high school. Aside from repeated and baseless accusations of plagiarism, her behavior pertaining to myself and other students was very inappropriate and she was fired this year - I graduated in '09.
Anyway, I'm now in college and a creative writing major. Here is a description I wrote about an incident I had with her in an attempt to lessen the lingering trauma.
"I shuddered, not from reaction to her outburst but her sudden change in appearance. Ann Marie's bleach blond hair, the frame of a face in its fifties, had turned static and wild. Her hazel eyes, ablaze beneath their squinting lids, resided daemon- like above fury flushed cheeks and pallid lips of
impossible thinness. Though I stood 5'8", even 5'10" within my boots, the small woman towered over me in metaphorical feet...Ann Marie’s voice, now an indisputable scream, disrupted the classes next door, their snickering embarrassingly audible. Her bony fingered hand, embellished with silver conceit, quivered terribly. Her index finger, rigid with certainty, pointed at me like a gun."
I was told by a classmate who graduated this year that she also had been mistreated by this crazy bitch...
I was hoping for some feedback on the passage and was wondering, would it be so terribly unkind to send this to the teacher?
Anyway, I'm now in college and a creative writing major. Here is a description I wrote about an incident I had with her in an attempt to lessen the lingering trauma.
"I shuddered, not from reaction to her outburst but her sudden change in appearance. Ann Marie's bleach blond hair, the frame of a face in its fifties, had turned static and wild. Her hazel eyes, ablaze beneath their squinting lids, resided daemon- like above fury flushed cheeks and pallid lips of
impossible thinness. Though I stood 5'8", even 5'10" within my boots, the small woman towered over me in metaphorical feet...Ann Marie’s voice, now an indisputable scream, disrupted the classes next door, their snickering embarrassingly audible. Her bony fingered hand, embellished with silver conceit, quivered terribly. Her index finger, rigid with certainty, pointed at me like a gun."
I was told by a classmate who graduated this year that she also had been mistreated by this crazy bitch...
I was hoping for some feedback on the passage and was wondering, would it be so terribly unkind to send this to the teacher?