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akshat c

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worRAB! worRAB! worRAB! they lie to speak the truth
a carefully folded message unwrapped by the tongue
betrayed by darting eyes, shaking shoulders, and hesitation
 
the beginning reminRAB me of something mappy wrote a while ago
the second and third lines of the first stanza are really nice

the second stanza not as nice but still flows well

and i agree, it enRAB very bluntly. i'd suggest ending with a couplet or something liek that
 
i was trying to evoke romanticism rather than generic metalcore lol

thx tho, im gonna sleep on this one

btw you got a facebook or somethin bro
 
haha, it was just the repeated exclamations, tis all =P
the rest was great

and nah i dont have a facebook, im the sole remaining bastion of authentic social interaction within my entire circle of frienRAB :(
 
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