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    Will you critique (be specific) this joined cinquain poem for me?

    Once My Home by Victoria Tarrani © 201101.10 It's time misty, I know lantern's light, deep shadows the cadence is calling me home it changed my place fragrant mint grows by the moss covered well this place no longer welcomes me tears fall.
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    C & C welcome. What do you think of this trio of science haiku?

    . astronomy's big day seventy-two minutes of a darkened moon . two forty A M North American viewers see coppery red moon . night's lunar eclipse fourteen hours later the winter solstice . by Victoria Tarrani zephyr (c) 201212.20 http://whoknew.news.yahoo.com/?nc&vid=23549392 It's actually...
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    C & C welcome. What do you think of this trio of science haiku?

    . astronomy's big day seventy-two minutes of a darkened moon . two forty A M North American viewers see coppery red moon . night's lunar eclipse fourteen hours later the winter solstice . by Victoria Tarrani zephyr (c) 201212.20 http://whoknew.news.yahoo.com/?nc&vid=23549392 It's actually...
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    I've never been able to write a good sonnet. Would you please C&C this sonnet?

    ??? Changes ??? a sonnet by Victoria Tarrani (c) 201011..15 She lay in the dark with tears in her eyes, not a bruise on her face, no other sign showed the pain in her gut, her rigid spine; he brought her water, she took the clear prize. Her lips, a ghastly semblance of her smile as she...
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    What do you think of my Shakespearean Sonnet for Act 5 in Romeo and Juliet?

    It's perfect. It is a perfect summary of the play, written in Olde English, and the theme and language fit the tone of the play. I disagree with Sam regarding the shift in the last six lines of a Shakespearean sonnet since it is famous, not only for the iambic pentameter, but also for the abab...
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    What say you to Hummingbirds poetry?

    Hummingbirds by Victoria Tarrani (c) 20100505 Hummingbird, hummingbird, fly away under and over the sweet flowers today more agile even than the bees moving down, back, up in the breeze into the night you dart and dance never sleeping it seems, I am in your trance. Glowing light opens my eyes...
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    What do you think of this haiku? (Japanese style)?

    Moonlight by Victoria Tarrani © (0207.31) midnight reflection; the lake shadows a white owl beak carries a rat. Great points. I'll see if I can figure out a season & last line that still shows the picture without emotion. Thank you. I also felt winter, Jeff. I see the same strangeness that you...
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