I'm an English major. Honestly, it looks fine to me. It's grammatically correct, but personally, I wouldn't use the word "descend." I would use a more simple word like "slip" or "give." I hope this helps.
I'm an English major. Honestly, it looks fine to me. It's grammatically correct, but personally, I wouldn't use the word "descend." I would use a more simple word like "slip" or "give." I hope this helps.