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    A sestina prompted by something Sue wrote yesterday. What is wrong (or right) with it?

    Young Love One look from him, her heart was swept away! Unsteady knees and trembling hands betrayed that firm resolve she'd made another day before events that shape a youthful mind could verify young love as mostly blind, a painful truth in wait for her to find. While he a lad both handsome...
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    A sestina prompted by something Sue wrote yesterday. What is wrong (or right) with it?

    Young Love One look from him, her heart was swept away! Unsteady knees and trembling hands betrayed that firm resolve she'd made another day before events that shape a youthful mind could verify young love as mostly blind, a painful truth in wait for her to find. While he a lad both handsome...
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    Is this villanelle worthy of BG's challenge?

    Where No Tear Falls Where no tear falls alone A wistful wind is blown When friends must say goodbye. There's nothing to condone And nothing to deny Where no tear falls alone. They part from what's been known With words in short supply When friends must say goodbye. The heart is like a stone...
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    Does the form of this poem (villanelle) clash with its topic?

    I sincerely want to know how others perceive it. Is a villanelle too "light" a form for the "heaviness" of this subject matter? Battered Woman It was as if no crime occurred On that or any other day To one whose pleas were seldom heard. When they believed his every word In spite of what she...
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    Can you offer some improvement for this rancid . . . Recipe?

    Recipe Start with a bagful of words from the past. Stir in some similes like a proper chef. Add a little irony for a touch of spice. Wrap in a metaphor bound up in a mask. Set aside to marinate for a day or two. Bake in an oven of rigid scrutiny. Top it with a title or some random name...
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    Will you please comment on this bit of free verse?

    Midnight Message In the middle of the night I wake from dreaming of being a well-known actress From a popular show I've always considered overly-saccharined pap. Since the guises we don often reflect salient features of self, I'm now left to wonder if the syrup I spew is too thick. For...
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    Will you walk with me [c/c] on the ... Beach?

    Memories of the Beach Morning air is crisp and clear, a taste of salt in every breath, where waves wash along the shore as if wanting to walk with me. Overhead in contentious flight, gulls and terns are squabbling in shrill squawks and cries, like kids playing in the park. Far away, well...
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    Can you hear the tolling of the bell?

    Tolling Of The Bell (a villanelle) Can you hear the tolling of the bell, whose wistful tones imprint upon the air? A doleful bell with stories yet to tell. A sad refrain that passes o'er the dell in search of where a knight was laid with care. Oh, can you hear the tolling of the bell? It...
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    Anyone up for a Meteor Shower poem?

    Meteor Shower Astroll in the moon's misty white Keep an eye on the sky tonite Where stars perform an ancient rite When they explode in brilliant light To tease the senses and incite Both young and old with fresh delight As they display their awesome sight Against the darkness of the night...
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