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    What do you think of this part of my book, it is the start of chapter2?

    Hi, would just like some opinions please? Thank you x I opened my eyes slowly. Shaking my head to clear the fuzziness, I attempted to look around. My vision was blurred; it was difficult to make out anything other than flickering orange lights, in the distance. My head was aching and I could...
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    The opening paragraph of my book, does it?

    Hi this is my opening para of my book, does it grab you and make you want to read more? If not, what is wrong with it and what would make it better? thanks x I heard the high pitched ring of the phone coming from down the hallway. It came, just as I had placed my hand on the door knob. I...
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    honda CRX burning oil is this normal?

    just got this car and not sure if the exhaust fumes are normal? also going through a litre 1/2 oil every two weeks is this normal?
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    Ok, I started to write a book a while back?

    but it is terrible lol, I will have to rewrite the whole first 2 chapters, but I dont know about this one, its chapter 3. story is a girl who has landed a job in New York as a stylist. She is just setteling in, in this chapter what do you think? As I enter Gaz's apartment it reminds me of my...
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    Female authors ...?

    lol crimson bloom well said , my dear lol xx
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    what do you think of my book(part two)?

    hi so what do you think of my book. I opened my eyes slowly. Shaking my head to clear the fuzziness, I attempted to look around. My vision was blurred, It was difficult to make out anything other than flickering orange lights, in the distance. My head was aching and I could feel the warm blood...
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