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    Feeling really sick!? What's wrong! Help please?

    Soo I can hardly breath at times. Have extremely bad stomach/ chest pains I can't even walk at times they hurt so bad especially after eating, times I forget how o breath. When I get up after laying down I get a stabbing pain in my head and I think I have blood in my stool... What's wrong with...
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    How is my poem? I edited it a lot ?

    look to black as to white colors fade to gray. Walls crashing in** I see the black and white blending in* Creating gray.Such a dull color So imperfect, just like the imperfect child* Seeks to please, sure to fail But where did your love go? Did your heart turn cold? look to white that fades to...
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    website to post poetry??? help please?

    where can i post my poems and get feedback... besides yahoo answers and devaintart? and for free?
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    Oh look! Another new poem! Will you read? Give advice and opinions?

    One love One hate Swirling within one another Breaking you down* Slicing you open from head to toes Your torn between the two For he left you to bleed* Like many other people do And he left another blade in your body With the slice wider then before* You feel it harder to breath Straining in and...
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    Oh look! Another new poem! Will you read? Give advice and opinions?

    One love One hate Swirling within one another Breaking you down* Slicing you open from head to toes Your torn between the two For he left you to bleed* Like many other people do And he left another blade in your body With the slice wider then before* You feel it harder to breath Straining in and...
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    Poem! Amy good or is it bad? Advice pretty please! ;)?

    One adventure One love Brought a melt down To my heart and my mind Trashing and snatching Aching and screaming I'm torn open* Not even bandages can heal me Nor stitches can fix my wounds They are to deep and rigged* Blood pooring from my vains* Loosing the light finding the dark...
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    New poem! Opinions please! Is it good or not? Advice please? ?

    One adventure One love Brought a melt down To my heart and my mind Trashing and snatching Aching and screaming I'm torn open* Not even bandages can heal me Nor stitches can fix my wounds They are to deep and rigged* Blood pooring from my vains* Loosing the light finding the dark Leading me to a...
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    How do you like my poem?

    Can't see through the trees Nor the clouds Or the fog Can't hear through the screams Nor the crys Or the laughs But through it all Through the storm* Is a girl As stiff as a statue For the pain in her heart Hurting as a sharp blade stabs Deeper and deeper* With tears running down...
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    Two new poems! PLEASE give advice!?

    Idk if they are any good. I'm in a very depressed mood. Let me know what you think of them. How can I make them better? Strike be down* For I'm a idiot Hate me now Hate me after One drink Two drinks not enough Three drinks just a buz sure enough you soon get too Four Maybe even after One cut.*...
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    New short poem. Opinions please?

    Their it is* That wire you once dreamed of Ready to hang it high Ready to fall to your cutting death With open scars covering your body You climb up the tree* To the wire Wraping it around your neck Soon blood begins to fall As you let your weight go You took your last breath* And hung...
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    What do you think about my new poem?

    And it's down once again Where I'm stuck in dark With nothing but my haunting pass And my new mistakes Nothing but a blade in one hand A bottle of beer in the other* Drinking my heart out* For I'm dying any ways With me loosing my mind Loosing my sight I go insane* I make one slice; Deep down...
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    Another new poem. Opinions?

    It's a dark place Filled with fright* With a hand raised high Looking for help For she feel long ago With slices on a imperfection skin Taking ahold Like possioned toxins Blood on the ground Next to a rigged knife With cans of the old famous Mikes hard lemonades She was far to drunk Far to...
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    Opinion on my poem? Can I get 5 or more?

    Faded discolored white Against your beautiful pail skin Traced, outlining old memories Leaving the deepest scars For you got sliced open Making dreams come real Always seeing a rose A rose dripping red* On to the grassy feilds* Red to the green Standing out like * Haunting souls Slicing through...
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    Can I get 5 or more opinions on my poem?

    Just a baby you were Not knowing what was going on Why everything happened the way it did Growing up, with a older couple But still you haven't found home Taken away from the only real home you had At*the age of two* Getting placed in a house filled of strangers Your lucky you still had...
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    New poem. What do you think?

    No one can see it See your pain They know your secret The one you stopped long ago But now you have a new one That no one knows Your drifting away* With scars on your body* And your bones begin to show This is your new way of life Hiding your secret No one knows you hardly eat But now your...
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    Help? Bible verse please!?

    I need a bible verse showing love, respect, support and carring. All or just some? Anything please?!?
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    Another new poem!! Opinions?

    Faded beautiful white frosted skin Turning into a feild of scars Skin flaking away Getting realesed by your addiction You can not stop It's a curse Holding it between your lips Pulling up your long sleeves You feel a wet drip* Running down your chin Must have cut your lips of sin With your...
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    New poem would like opinions? Thanks?

    Sky is black The rivers are roaring* Inviting you in Taking you under Feel the shards of a broken blade Stabing into your limbs Letting out your inocent blood Tast of dirty river water Lost of oxygen* Smell of nothing* See a reflection of you In the rusted gun Laying at the bottom of the...
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    A poem I wrote, should I give it to my best friend? ?

    She is starting to cut, not very bad but should I give het this before she gets worse, before she becomes how I did? Yes I've cut and this poem came from my heart. With all my experiences and feelings into it. So how is it? Opinions? Should I give it to her? The bitterness of the blade: Starts...
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    A poem I wrote, should I give it to my best friend? ?

    She is starting to cut, not very bad but should I give het this before she gets worse, before she becomes how I did? Yes I've cut and this poem came from my heart. With all my experiences and feelings into it. So how is it? Opinions? Should I give it to her? The bitterness of the blade: Starts...
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