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“Existence turns itself so fast” She says to the falling snow Lights a match, as though her last Describing what nobody knows Sits on the lap, he raises a hand Can’t replace the fear in all of his crimes Buries his suit and tie in the sand As clouds move in He kneels down to cry Neither saw...

In his head, the film projects a door A movie reel against a wall He wakes up in the war Skylight crashes to the earth The railing wouldn’t hold An explosion on the day of birth The days the sun was warm Ticking bodies in a van Arrive to pain in skin an bones Looking down to braking land He...

A man inside himself lays In the corners of his scars And the blood of time and life spill In the corner of his car He awaits the stir of bed sheets Awaits this stillborn life To the temperature In the hint of rain To the slipping of his brain His fingers only feel a fight, at a clouded window’s...

I have yet to predict, A smile in the portrait of an after marriage, Walking in, and out, and out of the way, Barking like a dog today, And crying in the next, Shaking madly at a glance The fog in the streets in just a nook in the world, Take the car down town, Watch is eyes, watch his fingers...

Expectations on rise, Watch it all go to waste, Powerless wind strikes a young boy’s face, See him run from the school yard, To his mind’s own disgrace, The flowers will die, I’ve been to this place. Just part of a poem, What do you think?

UGH very vague, no objective imagery! I am not saying you should quit, but you should not just focus on your own emotions because the reader doesn't care about "your emotions" the reader wants to FEEL that sadness, or that Joy! You should not just focus on the subjective things.