fate gave me an angel / handed down a gift / precious cargo to carry / delicate and sweet / intricate pieces / each with a form and function / eyes like jade / glistening with joy / crystal tears flow / a river of glee / a mouth of a goddess / voluptuous and true / speaking with such clarity /...
Really great. Even though there are cliches they work well at setting the tone. My favorite part is the second stanza. Maybe explore a little bit more of how drastically things have changed. It is obvious that they did, I would like to know how so and what happened. Keep up the good work. :)
Really great. Even though there are cliches they work well at setting the tone. My favorite part is the second stanza. Maybe explore a little bit more of how drastically things have changed. It is obvious that they did, I would like to know how so and what happened. Keep up the good work. :)
Really great. Even though there are cliches they work well at setting the tone. My favorite part is the second stanza. Maybe explore a little bit more of how drastically things have changed. It is obvious that they did, I would like to know how so and what happened. Keep up the good work. :)